佳句临摹
1. 佳句：It is irrational for college students to pursue famous brands.
临摹：对大学生来说，了解校园以外的世界是非常必要的。
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2. 佳句：In modern society, famous brands to some extent are equal to fashion, which have a great attraction to young college students.
临摹：在世界上或许没有什么游戏像赌博
像赌博的那么有害和危险了，它经常会导致一个人破产，还会玷污人的心灵。
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3. 佳句：Therefore, college students should attach more importance to cultivating a good character rather than pursuing famous brands.
临摹：很多同学经常玩电脑游戏，这是浪费时间，而不是一种有益的放松方式。
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write A Letter Applying for a Bank Loan. You should write at least 120 words following the outline given below in Chinese：
1)简单介绍个人情况
2)说明申请助学贷款的原因、数额
3)保证会合理利用贷款并表明还款的决心
A Letter Applying for a Bank Loan
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行文思路
本题属于情景式命题，要求写一封申请信。根据所给提纲，本文应包含如下内容：简单介绍自己的情况，表明写信目的：申请助学贷款;说明申请助学贷款的原因、数额;保证合理利用贷款并表明还款决心，最后表示感谢。
高分范文
A Letter Applying for a Bank Loan
Sep 12th, 2008
To whom it may concern,
I am a freshman of Lianhe University, [1]majoring in Applied Physics. I am writing in the hope that I may obtain a bank loan to support my study in Applied Physics for the following four years.
My parents are both laid-off workers, so it’s [2]beyond their power to finance me through the college education. [3]To make matters worse, my mother has suddenly fallen ill and is expecting a major operation. [4]Therefore, [5]with the college tuition becoming a much heavier burden on my family, I am compelled to apply a RMB20,000 bank loan.
[6]I give you my promise that the loan would be used properly. [4]Meanwhile, I’ll [7]spare no effort to work hard both in the study and my future career in order to pay back the loan. I would be greatly obliged if my application is granted. And I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Sincerely yours,
Song Xue
【亮点点评】
[1]“主修…”，现在分词作伴随状语。
[2]“超出…的能力范围”。
[3]“使事情更糟糕的是”。
[4]过渡衔接词语，使文章条理清晰、衔接紧密。
[5]“with+宾语+宾补”的独立结构。
[6]“我保证…”，that引导同位语从句。
[7]“不遗余力”。
佳句临摩
1.佳句：To make matters worse, my mother has suddenly fallen ill and is expecting a major operation.
临摩：令人更迷惑不解的是，很多飞机都从大海上离奇消失了。
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2.佳句：Therefore, the college tuition becoming a much heavier burden on my family, I am compelled to apply a RMB20,000 bank loan.
临摩：由于周围交通不便利，人们只得步行回家。
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3.佳句：Meanwhile, I’ll spare no effort to work hard both in the study and my future career in order to pay back the loan.
临摩：全国人民都不遗余力地支持北京举办奥运会。
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